Extra Credit

Paragraph: The tiger pattern kitten played with the ball. After the cat played with the ball he got a drink of water. He really likes eating cat fancy. This is not just any normal kitten, it is very picky about its' eats. When the kitten gets angry you can see his ears point upwards and his tail wags with aggression. The kitten was taken care of by a very old man that seemed to neglect it. Though the cat had a very happy and welcoming personality it was not treated with the respect it deserved.

Revised Paragraph: Screeching and scattering the cat patted the ball around the cluttered room. Breath panting, tail wagging, the cat scattered over to his water bowl and gracefully quenched his thirst. The kitten, a very picky eater, only eats cat fancy and will meow and hiss until the owner realizes his requests for only the best of cat foods. When the cat's requests are granted it is much happier and a lot more playful. The kitten, ears perched, was angry that his food dish was filled with left overs from the night before. The kitten, neglected by his owner, was mistreated and undernourished but still had a personality unlike any other cat. The cat was neglected but still ha a very welcoming and upbeat personality towards strangers and its owner. The young, exuberant kitten lived a good life, even though his owner was a scatter brain.